Status of Revision

There were many things that I revised. I revised my memoir many times. The main thing I revised as far as paragraph level was guiding the reader to the next paragraph. I also attempted to make my connections between the events I described and the "so what" stronger. The third thing that I revised was expressing what I had learned and really letting the reader know what I learned.
Three things I edited on a sentence level are; the things and its that I used to a lot, use of commas, and using detail to desrcibe what was happening.